The STEM curriculum has been encouraged in school for quite some time, and many in the field become successful, so why change the curriculum to STEAM now? Yo Yo Ma brought up the idea of trying to involve empathy into the field in order to improve, and reach an equilibrium. Within the essay, Ma states: “…the most proficient way to teach the values of collaboration, flexibility, imagination, and innovation- all the skills sets needed in today’s world- is through the preforming arts. If you have these tools, you can do well in any field from software engineering to the biosciences.” How is this so? When you really think about it the preforming arts and STEM mindsets are very different. You would think about being proficient in a science field you need to take science related courses not an arts course.
I think to help strengthen your argument maybe using some yo-yo ma quotes are giving more analysis to help the overall strength of the paragraph.
I like how you included a statement from Yo-Yo Ma into your argument. I suggest maybe making your argument a little stronger by giving more examples as to why the arts don’t need to be included into the curriculum. I also really liked how you started the paragraph with a question.
I like how you wrote this blog. You used ideas and quotes from Yo-Yo Ma to back up what you were saying. Also I admire the use of questions. It keeps the reader intrigued as well as putting the questions in their heads and having them personally think about it.